I don’t have a lot of experiences with writing but still, I have my unique style. My style of writing is writing only the essential points. That is, my writing is usually very easy to understand. My strength is that my writing is as clear as science or math. It is not hard to find out what I’m talking about. However, this style of writing sometimes lacks deepness. It is easy to read and understand, but that’s all. No more meanings or emotions are contained in it. It could be compared to a body. My essay just has bones. It makes the essay very clear, but without the flesh, it feels somewhat empty and is usually very short. Therefore, I need to improve the skill of writing long and still not losing clarity. I would very much like to write a long essay and still maintain my strength of clearness. My goal is to kick redundancy out of my essay and by that, benefit in both length and clarity.
My best work until now was an essay I wrote when I was preparing for the Toefl exam. I revised it several times and wrote it over and over. Finally, I got my best work. I submitted it to my writing teacher and she gave me full points. Before that essay, my writing score hovered over the early twenties. I was paid back for my hard work and the time spent for the work by my enhanced writing ability. Since then, I got higher scores in my writing assignments and when I actually took the Toefl, I got 30, the top score I could get. This essay was an event that showed myself that I too, was capable of working hard, just like the people on the TV for successful life. However, it was deleted when I had to fix my laptop and is not available for now.
Since my goal is to get rid of redundancy, I would like to learn some skills to get rid of it. Also, I lack ideas for my essay, which makes it even more redundant. Learning more skills to develop and support my ideas would be a way to solve my problems and strengthen my essay. Things I do not want is overloaded vocabulary. Actually, I do not use a wide variety of words in my essay and there is insufficient time to memorize all the vocabularies. In last semester, reality forced me to choose either to memorize the wordsmart book or do other homework and get grades from them. I actually do not want to make that kind of decision again. As for class, the primary thing should be how much we get. However, I believe that how exciting the class is actually effects on the student’s efficiency of learning. Therefore, I hope the class to be fun and exciting rather than difficult and heavy. I am really looking forward to this semester, and hope that I could learn a lot more about writing.
You really seem to have a realistic sense of your writing, and I agree with most of what you say. But your description of lacking depth actually showed a lot of depth, and you even produce a clever metaphor with skin on bones. So it's good to be your own worst critic, but it's also beneficial to recognize your strengths. The above post looks like an awkward chunk of heavy paragraphs. Either indent or insert a line, and be sure to utilize the tried and true TOEFL style 5 paragraphs that look balanced. It might seem cliche, but an essay should look like an essay and have a bit of sculpted structure. You might also want to jazz up your intros to be more hooky and creative. I read a bit of your TED essay and the intro was a bit unspecific and bland. I hope this semester will get your creative juices flowing. Good writing here with hardly any grammatical issues.
답글삭제If I have one thing to say in terms of a first impression, it has to do with formatting and messy paragraphs.